Your Story 67—Winners!

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Prompt: Write the opening sentence (just one sentence), of 25 words or fewer, to a story based on the photo to the left.

 

Thanks to everyone who entered and/or voted in WD’s Your Story 67! Here are the results. The winners, in ranking order, are as follows:


1. Thin, punctured cotton: Useless against a city’s winter and meager protection when one witnesses a stranger step from a chipped mural’s surface, knife in hand.

2. I reached the tunnel with the vibrant markings—just like the one from my son’s crayon drawings—and knew this was where he had gone.

3. Peter strolled, rather bored, through his own consciousness, but his stomach clenched as he came around the bright corner that housed his childhood memories.

4. Walking back through the tunnel to Earth, I wondered how I could possibly convince everyone heaven was only two miles east.

5. The artist lured collectors to his underground show by painting a fresco on the tunnel wall, and then he trapped them…

6. Caleb reflected on the impending juxtaposition of blood and paint even before he pulled the trigger.

7. People say that seeing color for the first time is captivating, awe-inspiring, magical; but they never said that it hurt.

8. As I stumbled out alone, all I could think about was how proud all twelve of us were when we paraded in 84 days ago.

9. He looked so striking silhouetted against the tunnel entrance—like the pupil of some incandescent eye—that he couldn’t bring himself to pull the trigger.

10. The wash rushed in, and he shielded his eyes as the color pierced the grey tunnels—he knew better than to touch the light.

 

 

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69 thoughts on “Your Story 67—Winners!

  1. rhanning

    WOW I must have changed my mind 10 times. I decided on “B” because of the build up, then I was surprised with the last word. Made me want more. The author fit a lot in to a short sentence. My second choice is E.

  2. CJ

    H gets my vote: “Peter strolled, rather bored, through his own consciousness, but his stomach clenched as he came around the bright corner that housed his childhood memories.”
    Out of all the entries, this one has the most emotional impact, without being gimmicky or unrealistic. It also makes the most sense with the given picture. I hope H wins!

  3. tricheratops

    My vote is for H …“Peter strolled, rather bored, through his own consciousness, but his stomach clenched as he came around the bright corner that housed his childhood memories.”

  4. Erin LeTourneur

    I vote for G. It pulls the reader in and puts a lot of questions in their mind. Why did the little boy go through the tunnel? How did he know what it looked like beforehand? How did his parent find it and know for sure that he would be there?

  5. MakeTimeToPlay@gmx.com

    G. I reached the tunnel with the vibrant markings—just like the one from my son’s crayon drawings—and knew this was where he had gone.

    Intriguing! Come on, give us more, PLEASE! Wouldn’t that be exciting if Writer’s Digest gave the author the opportunity to elaborate on their capturing sentence! Hint, hint. ;D

    Happy Trails!

    1. MakeTimeToPlay@gmx.com

      I chose G and stick with my choice but B was also very interesting and would be my second choice. I wish them both well. I like your comment. 🙂

  6. JoiKentucky

    My favorite one is “H” – “Peter strolled, rather bored, through his own consciousness, but his stomach clenched as he came around the bright corner that housed his childhood memories.” It’s the one that made me want to read more. I’d love to know where the author was headed!!

    1. Baihley Grandison Post author

      Hi there! This has closed, and we will be judging entries next week. Look for the top 10 entries for voting to be posted by the end of next week!

      1. Judith Marie

        Ahem! I swear I am not new to the computing world, sorry Christopher Allen for my intrusion. Apperantly my post didn’t make it, I am now thoroughly embarrassed if you need me I will be just over there with my head buried in the sand.

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