Your Story 67—Winners!

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Prompt: Write the opening sentence (just one sentence), of 25 words or fewer, to a story based on the photo to the left.

 

Thanks to everyone who entered and/or voted in WD’s Your Story 67! Here are the results. The winners, in ranking order, are as follows:


1. Thin, punctured cotton: Useless against a city’s winter and meager protection when one witnesses a stranger step from a chipped mural’s surface, knife in hand.

2. I reached the tunnel with the vibrant markings—just like the one from my son’s crayon drawings—and knew this was where he had gone.

3. Peter strolled, rather bored, through his own consciousness, but his stomach clenched as he came around the bright corner that housed his childhood memories.

4. Walking back through the tunnel to Earth, I wondered how I could possibly convince everyone heaven was only two miles east.

5. The artist lured collectors to his underground show by painting a fresco on the tunnel wall, and then he trapped them…

6. Caleb reflected on the impending juxtaposition of blood and paint even before he pulled the trigger.

7. People say that seeing color for the first time is captivating, awe-inspiring, magical; but they never said that it hurt.

8. As I stumbled out alone, all I could think about was how proud all twelve of us were when we paraded in 84 days ago.

9. He looked so striking silhouetted against the tunnel entrance—like the pupil of some incandescent eye—that he couldn’t bring himself to pull the trigger.

10. The wash rushed in, and he shielded his eyes as the color pierced the grey tunnels—he knew better than to touch the light.

 

 

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69 thoughts on “Your Story 67—Winners!

  1. Crimson Lion

    My Vote: G

    My Reviews:

    A) This sentence gives the sensation of a mystery book or a crime series. However, this picture doesn’t give off that sensation and there is only one person there, which makes “collectors” a weak statement.

    B) This sentence is compatible with the picture, but not enough to make it inspiring like a story that would make the readers want to know more. With a few improvements, this sentence could become a story of its own.

    C) This sentence is quite unclear. Where did “blood” and a “trigger” become profound in this picture?

    D) This sentence is somewhat good, as it makes the readers want to know more. Fix it a little, and a lot of readers would want to see the whole story.

    E) This sentence is pretty good, as it makes the readers want to know what the story is about, such as what light is the author talking about? However, compared with the other choices, sentence E doesn’t make the cut.

    F) A more elaborate version of sentence C with a more inspiring taste, but the “trigger” part is a bit unclear still.

    G) This sentence is much like the other candidates, but it seems that this sentence and this picture goes perfectly with each other, and this sentence seems to be much easier to be turned into as a novel, story, whatever.

    H) This sentence is in an equal value of sentence G, but unlike sentence G, it seems to be a bit more difficult to turn into a story.

    I) It’s never a good idea to bring in any components of heaven, hell, religion, nor politics into a story. This is because it could diminish a story immediately, unless the story is tied together with those topics, which would be a rare chance of bringing success.

    J) The sentence makes no sense whatsoever with the picture. There are no components in this sentence that becomes compatible with the picture at all.

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