Your Story #71: Winners!

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  • Prompt: Write the opening sentence (just one sentence), of 25 words or fewer, to a story based on the photo to the left. You can be funny, poignant, witty, etc.; it is, after all, your story.

Thanks to everyone who entered and/or voted in WD’s Your Story 71! Here are the results. The winners, in ranking order, are as follows:

1. Being lost and low on fuel didn’t mean much once I saw the flash: too fast for a sunrise and too slow for an explosion. (Dennis Collins)

2. Only I know he never touched the brakes at the top of the pass, but my silence was bought by the pine impaling the windshield. (Carie Sherman)

3. Scott drove slowly down the snowy road thinking he had committed the perfect crime, but the rising sun wasn’t his only witness. (Wanda Kiernan)

4. I’ll never get away with it, she thought as she watched him head down the mountain, the loosened lug nuts already working themselves free. (C.W. Accetta)

5. Waving an enthusiastic goodbye as he peeled down the mountainside, his mother turns to me and asks, “You made sure to cut the brakes, right?” (Andrea Ritterbeck)

6. The things we do to get a decent cup of coffee. (Joshua Albritton)

7. Stopping the jeep, our excitement turned to horror as we realized the fresh powder of the new year was not snow, but human ashes. (Jamie Galapia)

8. The jeep rolled out of the burned out forest completely without damage, or a driver. (Lisa Spargo)

9. David gunned the stolen Jeep around another curve on the snow-packed wilderness road, unaware of the sun and mist-hidden pedestrian ahead. (Michael Hamer)

10. Jacob gaped at his side mirror, where 200 yards back he saw Nina’s truck emerge over a dip, 12-gauge still pointed out the driver’s window. (Laura Saienni)

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74 thoughts on “Your Story #71: Winners!

  1. mmckean1984

    All of these entries are great; but I’m just curious – what do they look for in this contest? I’ve been entering for a while now and I never win. Is it me? Am I just a bad writer, unlucky, or what? Here’s the sentence I submitted. Please, if anyone is reading this, let me know what I’m doing wrong so I can fix it. “Sometimes, late at night, when it’s quiet and I’m lonely, I imagine I escaped – that I didn’t die here locked in this room.” Thank you.

    1. A.Renae

      Hello!
      First, I would like to say that your sentence definitely grabs me and makes me want to continue reading! The reason you haven’t won yet isn’t because you aren’t a good writer, but maybe because what you have written isn’t applicable to the picture. I understand the connection you’re trying to make to the picture is “escaping”, but that may not be specific enough. Almost all of the sentences above include some major aspect of the picture like the jeep, driving, or the landscape. I hope this helps! Good luck! 😀

      1. mmckean1984

        Thank you for taking the time to respond. You’re right – it isn’t very specific to the picture. There’s room for improvement on that front. Definitely something to take into consideration for next time. Did you enter a sentence this round?

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