A great beginning doesn’t guarantee a successful novel. But it certainly knocks down the first major hurdle for busy book browsers. And don’t forget your very first readers: highly selective editors and agents who are looking for a reason to reject your project.
Let’s take a look at six ways you can pull off the big grab from the very first lines.
Studying the types of hooks that prolific (and bestselling) authors have used is a great way to learn how to craft your own beginnings. Here are some of Dean Koontz’s opening hooks:
Tuesday was a fine California day, full of sunshine and promise, until Harry Lyon had to shoot someone at lunch. (Dragon Tears)
Penny Dawson woke and heard something moving furtively in the dark bedroom. (Darkfall)
Katharine Sellers was sure that, at any moment, the car would begin to slide along the smooth, icy pavement and she would lose control of it. (Dance With the Devil, written as Deanna Dwyer)
A couple of elements make these openings successful. First, they give us a characterby name. This creates the illusion of reality from the get-go.
Some writers begin with a pronoun: She heard something moving in her bedroom. But with Koontz’s approach, a name gives an extra measure of verisimilitude and makes the willing suspension of disbelief that much easier.
Second, something is happening or is about to happen to the named character. And not just anythingsomething intriguing.
Note, however, that the intrigue doesn’t have to be typical of commercial, plot-driven fiction. It works just as well in a literary novel, such as Blue Shoe by Anne Lamott:
The world outside the window was in flames. The leaves on the pistachio trees shone fire-red and orange. Mattie studied the early morning light. She was lying on the side of the bed where her husband should have been sleeping.
In this example, Lamott starts with description. But she gets a character into the mix by the third sentence. And then she drops in a line indicating something amissher husband isn’t where he should be.
We have a feeling of unease. Mattie is in the midst of a troubling situation and is going to have to do something about it.
Another opening method is to drop a hint of mystery into the proceedings. My novel Breach of Promise begins like this:
We were halfway through Twister, and Helen Hunt was about to run down another relentless force of nature, when I turned to Paula and said, “Please don’t do it.”
Now the reader wants to find out what the narrator doesn’t want Paula to do. Several paragraphs follow before the answer is revealed.
James M. Cain’s The Postman Always Rings Twice begins:
They threw me off the hay truck about noon.
We are, as they say, in medias resthe middle of things. One technique to get you there: After your first draft, make Chapter 2 your first chapter. Almost always, things move faster.
Another form of immediate action is starting with dialogue. If there’s an element of conflict in there, so much the better. I chose this for my opening in Final Witness:
“How old are you?”
“Going into your third year?”
“Second in your class?”
“Isn’t it true you have a motive to lie?”
“Excuse me?” Rachel Ybarra felt her face start to burn. That question had come from nowhere, like a slap. She sat up a little straighter in the chair.
This cross-examination style plunges us into instant conflict between two characters.
The Quiet Game by Greg Iles begins with a father holding his 4-year-old daughter as they wait in a line at Disney World:
Annie jerks taut in my arms and points into the crowd.
“Daddy! I saw Mama! Hurry!”
I do not look. I don’t ask where. I don’t because Annie’s mother died seven months ago. I stand motionless in the line, looking just like everyone else except for the hot tears that have begun to sting my eyes.
We’re immediately bonded to the lead through his deep feeling of a universal emotion.
Still another way to capture attention from the start is with the look-back hook. Here’s how Stephen King does it:
The terror, which would not end for another 28 yearsif it ever did endbegan, so far as I can tell, with a boat made from a sheet of newspaper floating down a gutter swollen with rain. (IT)
The two things Sarah remembered about that night later were his run of luck at the Wheel of Fortune and the mask. But as time passed, years of it, it was the mask she thought aboutwhen she could bring herself to think about that horrible night at all. (The Dead Zone)
These hooks suggest there’s a not-to-be-missed story about to unfold.
When using first-person narration, especially in literary fiction, you can capture attention through voice and attitude. J.D. Salinger accomplishes this in his classic, The Catcher in the Rye:
If you really want to hear about it, the first thing you’ll probably want to know is where I was born, and what my lousy childhood was like, and how my parents were occupied and all before they had me, and all that David Copperfield kind of crap, but I don’t feel like going into it, if you want to know the truth.
Grab your readers by judicious use of the above methods. You still have a long way to go to keep them reading, but you’ll have a good lead out of the gate.