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How to Use Profanity And Other Raw Talk In Your Fiction

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The expletive known in polite circles as “the f-word” was most famously used in a major novel, Norman Mailer’s The Naked and the Dead, published in 1948.

Except it wasn’t.

—Elizabeth Sims

Mailer’s publisher prevailed upon him to change the common but crass four-letter description of sex to “fug,” so as not to offend readers. Given the fact that the book was about men at war, the word occurred a lot. This resulted in a cluster-fug of criticism and discussion in literary circles, and gave rise to the anecdote about Tallulah Bankhead (or in some versions, Dorothy Parker) meeting Mailer and saying, “Oh, you’re the man who can’t spell that word.”

Times change.

These days, the f-word has lost some of its shock value, and most people—though by no means all—are not deeply offended by it. Still, authors often debate the role of racy talk in contemporary literature.

How much is too much? How do you know when you’ve gone too far, or not far enough?

First, let’s consider the rich palette of risqué words available to us and clarify their technical differences, so we know what’s what. Once you can differentiate among profanities, curses, obscenities and the like, you’ll be better equipped to determine how, why, and if you should use them.

Profanity

Although it is often used to denote any objectionable word, profanity literally means words that are considered profane—that is, words proscribed by religious doctrine. (Proscribed generally means forbidden by written order.) In the Judeo-Christian tradition, this primarily means taking the Lord’s name in vain (that is, not in prayer).

For the love of God, stop complaining.

Jesus Christ, look at the size of that thing!

Curses

A curse calls upon a deity, or fate, to visit harm on someone or something.

Mild curse: Damn this zipper!

Strong curse: Goddamn her!

To be “damned” is to be condemned to hell. (See the common root lurking in condemned/damned?)

“Hell” can also be used as a curse—

Go to hell!

—or as mild profanity—

Oh, hell, the Potomac’s polluted again!

Swears

To swear literally means to take an oath, or to proclaim an oath. (An oath is a resolution or promise, usually calling on the deity’s assistance in carrying it out.)

As God is my witness, I’ll never go hungry again!

By God, I’ll show you!

Swearing can also be used to bear witness:

I swear, you’re the best cook in Memphis!

Obscenities

Obscene means something disgusting or morally abhorrent, often connoting sex. The f-word is considered the most objectionable of these. (Adding “mother” as a prefix ups the ante.)

Non-objectionable variants of the present participle form of the word—besides “fugging”—include “fecking,” “freaking,” “flipping” and “fricking.” (To be honest, I really don’t know why that “u” is so important.)

“Screw” is a milder word. Notice that both the f-word and “screw” are used not just to literally describe the act of intercourse, but to connote “taking advantage of”:

Don’t go to that repair shop—they screwed me out of $500 for a brake job I didn’t need.

Words referring to the pelvic area, male and female, are also considered obscenities.

Vulgarisms

Vulgarism is a great word that covers a lot of bases. If it’s crude and objectionable and falls outside the aforementioned categories, you’ve got yourself a vulgarism.

Casting aspersions on the circumstances of a person’s birth qualifies as a vulgarism. “Bitch,” “son of a bitch” and “bastard” can be termed vulgarisms. Ditto for “jackass,” which is often used as a substitute for another two-syllable word that starts with “ass.”

Excretory acts and their results fall under this rubric as well. “Crap” seems to be the only one that’s acceptable virtually everywhere.

To Use or Not to Use

Authors are divided about spicy talk, which is not surprising because readers are divided about it. Some really popular tough-guy authors—Lee Child comes to mind—use no profanity in their books, and lots of readers don’t even notice. Why? Because Child, for instance, doesn’t even write the watered-down “dammit,” which would call attention to the fact that he’s not using “Goddamn it.” For the same reason he’s certainly not going to have his characters, who blow one another’s brains out at the drop of a hat, say “darn it.” On the other hand, Tom Clancy, another leader in the same genre, uses lots of profanity, and he sure sells books.

Some readers are turned off by even a single curse word, whereas nobody will buy your book simply because you use raw language. So the safest path is to use zero raw language, right?

Well, writing is a journey, and journeys involve risks. I’m certain there are authors who have been successful in part because they shun propriety. I remember being happily shocked by Holden Caulfield’s speech in The Catcher in the Rye when I was a teenager.

As you write, look for a balance involving what you feel comfortable writing, what suits the characters and story you are creating, and what might please or displease your hoped-for readers.

Why to Use

Humans get angry. They crave precise expression. There’s something about cursing or using vulgar language that acts as a release valve. Most of us have experienced a moment when a good old rule-breaking bad word just feels sublime rolling off the tongue, and so it is for fictional characters. Be true and honest to the voices of those characters. Moreover, if you want to write realistically about certain milieus, such as wharves, mines and battlefields, well-written raw talk can make your characters seem lifelike and more authentic.

How to Use

Spicy language generally works best when it’s used sparingly, or at least in moderation. That way, you preserve the element of the unexpected, which can be a pressure-reliever for both character and reader. Aside from conveying anger or frustration, raw talk can also be humorous, in that it reveals how a character truly feels about something. For instance:

I ate another doughnut.

Versus:

I ate another goddamned doughnut.

You instantly get a clue about this character and her relationship with doughnuts.

You can also have a character who habitually uses profanity in contrast to others who don’t. That, in itself, is a good individualizer.

In the case of the wharf-workers, miners and soldiers, here’s a caveat to remember: You shouldn’t just throw in spicy talk willy-nilly. You have to make it sound real. Go and listen to the people who populate the worlds you’re writing about. Read about them, experiment, read their words aloud.

But even if real cliff-blasting miners use a vulgarism every other word, it’s unnecessary for you to make your characters talk exactly that way. Just as with dialect and accents, using raw talk wisely serves to keep the reader grounded in your imaginary world, while avoiding the potential fatigue of overdoing it.

Consider your characters and employ common sense. A suburban matron wearing a linen dress and pearls might never swear in public, but she might let loose in the principal’s office over a dispute between her kid and a teacher, or when she breaks a nail opening her prescription amphetamines.

How Not to Use

Shakespeare knew that raw talk is the spice of writing.

He wrote the mother of all literary cuss-outs (cuss
is simply a variant of curse) in King Lear, but interestingly there is no profanity or obscenity as we know it, merely terrifically imaginative vulgarisms, delivered with passion. Here it is, the Earl of Kent preparing to thrash the crap out of Goneril’s loathsome lackey, Oswald:

KENT (TO OSWALD): A knave; a rascal; an eater of broken meats; a base, proud, shallow, beggarly, three-suited, hundred-pound, filthy, worsted-stocking knave; a lily-liver’d, action-taking, whoreson, glass-gazing, superserviceable, finical rogue; one-trunk-inheriting slave; one that wouldst be a bawd in way of good service, and art nothing but the composition of a knave, beggar, coward, pander, and the son and heir of a mongrel bitch, one whom I will beat into clamorous whining if thou deniest the least syllable of thy addition.

Knowing the historical references helps; for example, “broken meats” means leftover table scraps. But even without that, we can luxuriate in the rant. This is a beautiful speech for many reasons: It’s forceful, it’s unique, it covers many aspects of insult, it clearly communicates one character’s contempt of another, and—important for many in Shakespeare’s audience—it avoids serious curses and obscenities.

It’s a shining example of how a writer can invent insults way more entertaining than those found in the standard lexicon.

You can do it by brainstorming aspects of your characters and their circumstances:

He was as appealing as a baboon’s butt.

You are the worst thing to happen to the world since
call waiting.

May you be condemned to an eternity of weak coffee, warm gin and a driveway paved with roofing nails.

By now, I think you’ll agree that it’s useful to explore—and perhaps even challenge—your own comfort zone. Certainly if it’s not you, it won’t ring true. But whether you decide to write common curses and vulgarisms
into your work or not, your characters do need a verbal pressure valve. Don’t use tacky asterisks to replace
vowels. Just have fun with the process and remember that a fug by any other name might sound remarkably original.

Contributing editor Elizabeth Sims (elizabethsims.com) is the author of eight books, including the Rita Farmer mysteries and the Lillian Byrd crime novels, and the brand-new instructional title You’ve Got a Book in You: A Stress-Free Guide to Writing the Book of Your Dreams (WD Books).

 

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17 Responses to How to Use Profanity And Other Raw Talk In Your Fiction

  1. vrundell says:

    Great article Elizabeth.
    I write YA and am TRYING not to let my personal teenaged inspiration (child) influence the speech beyond reason. Still the manuscript (and child) may require a thorough mouth-washing.
    Is Lifebuoy still on the market? More importantly, is it Word-compatible?

    PS. I’m constantly reviewing erotic romance/New Adult fiction and guess what the taboo word is there…one hint: it starts with “C” and rhymes with ‘hunt’. No compunction to withhold the F-bomb in that genre…
    Best,
    Veronica
    http://vsreads.com

  2. mikepascale says:

    Excellent food for thought. I like the various distinctions you used for each descriptor–even though to the general public, “swearing”, “profanity” and “using obscenities” are pretty much all the same. (Just an FYI, Lee Child may not use “technical profanity” but he still uses four-letter words–at least he did in his latest–so that doesn’t make his books seem “clean” to me. If a writer uses “s**t” but not “g**damn”, I doubt most would notice.)

    But I greatly appreciate your time and effort in tackling the subject and trying to make sense of it to help other writers. Definitely more than most have!

  3. Chris Cannon says:

    Great article. I write young adult fiction, and I feel like I’m always straddling the line between how teens actually talk and what adults want to believe that they say.

  4. EdwardPaul says:

    Thank you so much for this article. This is exactly what I am struggling with right now.

    I am in the middle of a military sci-fi story. Being a veteran and a son of a construction worker, I know I have the speech impediment known as a “foul mouth”. I know how military-speak is. However, I don’t want to handicap my ability to get published because some wishy-washy pansied dressed overweight impotent acne-ridden still-living-in-his-mother’s-basement rejected failed author of an editor gets offended by my offensive writing. (see what I did there?)

    With that said, I will stick with the Shakespeare School of Vulgarity, otherwise known as Clark W Griswold’s School of Rant.

    It is funny – first week of boot camp oh so many years ago, before the recruits get their “real” drill instructors, the drill instructor who is in charge of getting you “set up in the system” doesn’t swear. His insults were the most colorful displays of the English language I have ever heard, but he never swore.

  5. Sagana says:

    This is an interesting and helpful article. But the Shakespeare quote doesn’t avoid vulgarity. It includes both “whoreson” and ‘son of a bitch’ (“the son and heir of a mongrel bitch”). Both of those are fairly strong even in modern terms, although they’re phrased in a way that make them quaint or obscure. I suspect many of the other words in that are harsh for their time, even if we don’t recognize them as such today.

  6. Brian, THANKS for posting this! Very happy to see the piece in wider circulation.

  7. DanielR says:

    Good article. Profanity in books should be used when it makes dialogue realistic. As long as it is authentic it is fine. Unfortunately far too many books these days seem to use it just for he sake of using it.

  8. Scorpiaux says:

    Around two years ago I wrote a short satire (2300 words) on profanity and politics. I have sat on it looking for a place to submit it. My preference is the Writer’s Digest. The story goes to the heart of the matter and will make the reader laugh. To whom do I submit it for a review and consideration at WD? Those readers who liked this article will love this story. The title is The Nouveau Bitch.

  9. Mary Sadler says:

    In ‘The Luminaries’ Eleanor Catton consistently writes d-n and even, once, f-ing. Wouldn’t she have won the Booker otherwise?

  10. Bigfoot says:

    Excellent! I had a welder working for me who used the F word every breath. Didn’t even realize it. Although it had lost its shock value for him, it was still offensive. Some craftsmen swore seldom, but most would fall into the vernacular except when a woman was around. I have a dear Aunt who seldom even gets upset, but sometimes frustration will have her call out ‘Biscuit’. So, know your audience (within the story) and your speaker (character).

  11. This is a good article on a little written about subject. I myself use restraint when using profanity and raw talk and make sure it is appropriate to the story and character. I purchased Ms. Sims book You’ve Got a Book In You and thought it was a top rate how to book on how to write a novel. I especially liked her chapters on getting started on your story or novel and brainstorming. She said to keep writing until you see the story in the writing. I have had writing instructors tell me the same thing. I recommend Elizabeth Sims book to any aspiring novel writer.

  12. Tresix says:

    This reminds me of when I let a girlfriend of mine read one of my stories. She accused me of having too much profanity on the first two pages. To demonstrate how wrong she was, I counted all of the words on the first two pages. Total number of words: 853; total number of curse words: 4. The real kicker was this woman would have shocked the audience on “Def Comedy Jam” with her mouth!

  13. CaroleDose.biz@gmail.com says:

    What a clearly written and informative article. Thank you for that. I hadn’t thought to use entertaining condemnatory words in my post Civil War novel. Given that Union officers were forbidden to curse, and could even be disciplined for it, this has opened up a whole new world of exploration, not to mention condemning them through Shakespeare.

    Thank you! Thank you!! Caro Dosé

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