The Day Before -Feedback Welcome Home › Forums › Critique Central › Poetry › The Day Before -Feedback Welcome This topic contains 1 reply, has 2 voices, and was last updated by writer_guy 5 months ago. Author Posts January 19, 2018 at 2:19 am #346733 carissaaldersonParticipant I was going to say I think I’ve lost my mind But that wouldn’t be descriptive enough When every day I try to find my thoughts from the day before I’ve written things I never remember There are feelings I cannot recall How can I be in love, if I don’t remember the fall? https://scrapbookofamind.blogspot.com/2018/01/the-day-before.html April 16, 2018 at 8:29 pm #655406 writer_guyParticipant Hi there! I didn’t like the sound of the word “descriptive” and thought also that your rhyming scheme is inconsistent, but I think you’ll get there – keep it up! Author Posts You must be logged in to reply to this topic.