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  • #330010

    megamillions
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  • #530248

    megamillions
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    πŸ™‚

  • #530249

    shari2t17
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    Lisa,
    Delightful reading. Free and easy.

  • #530250

    LorrieAT
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    Lisa, I love this one. It is well written and well thought out. Smooth reading even if the sailing wasn’t.

  • #530251

    barb schmeling
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    Drifting on my bed of poor
    now perched atop a cabin door
    while gentle winds blow through my hair
    searching for another fare.

    Lisa, this is my favorite stanza, I love the way it flows and it is well written. Great job. :emoticon:

  • #530252

    megamillions
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    Thanks Stashia,

    I am on the water right now working. (I work on boats)
    Although I am on a 65ft yacht, there is a beautiful sailboat here and it made me think of this one.

    Your compliments makes me smile, thanks for reading. πŸ™‚

  • #530253

    megamillions
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    Thanks Stashia,

    I am on the water right now working. (I work on boats)
    Although I am on a 65ft yacht, there is a beautiful sailboat here and it made me think of this one.

    Your compliments makes me smile, thanks for reading. πŸ™‚

  • #530254

    megamillions
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    Hi Gilbert πŸ™‚

    I have not sailed at all this year. I am missing it for sure.
    Thank you for noticing how well thought out it is.

    Are you a sailor? πŸ˜‰

  • #530255

    megamillions
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    Hi Gilbert πŸ™‚

    I have not sailed at all this year. I am missing it for sure.
    Thank you for noticing how well thought out it is.

    Are you a sailor? πŸ˜‰

  • #530256

    megamillions
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    Hello Angel,

    I think it is a major compliment when someone likes your last stanza.

    Sometimes we can write a good poem, and end it badly. The finish can be difficult, and knowing when and how to stop takes practice…and I am still learning. πŸ™‚

    This one almost went on for a few more stanzas. I am learning less is more.

    Thanks sweetheart.

  • #530257

    paris1929
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    You and I are going to get along just fine girlfriend. I really can not only take in the words you write easily but digest them to understand as well. Thank for another good read.
    Tera

  • #530258

    AKnursewriter
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    Very pleasant and an easy read.
    My favorite stanza:
    It’s sheets not made for me to sleep
    devoted to the wind they keep
    unfurling them to billow fast
    I trim them to my clanking mast

    Thanks for another good one, Lisa!

  • #530259

    AKnursewriter
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    Very pleasant and an easy read.
    My favorite stanza:
    It’s sheets not made for me to sleep
    devoted to the wind they keep
    unfurling them to billow fast
    I trim them to my clanking mast

    Thanks for another good one, Lisa!

  • #530260

    megamillions
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    Thanks mamma!

    I have done my job then.

    :emoticon:

    Welcome to the forum!

  • #530261

    megamillions
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    Hey there Tera,

    You and I already share something familiar.

    And I think we already get along just fine. πŸ™‚
    Thanks for reading.

    I went to your blog…very cool.

  • #530262

    megamillions
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    Hi Fred!

    I was hoping you’d get a chance to read this one.
    I haven’t seen you here lately…you are missed.

    The stanza you like, is also my favorite. I only had to remember sailing, for it to appear as those words.

    Thank you Fred, I value the compliment. πŸ™‚

  • #530263

    AKnursewriter
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    In the 80’s my favorite song was “Sailing” by Christopher Cross. Many of your poems evoke that same feeling with me.
    I’ve been busy lately, but also have a major case of writer’s block. I can’t seem to put two words together lately. So I’m just enjoying what you and others post.

  • #530264

    AKnursewriter
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    In the 80’s my favorite song was “Sailing” by Christopher Cross. Many of your poems evoke that same feeling with me.
    I’ve been busy lately, but also have a major case of writer’s block. I can’t seem to put two words together lately. So I’m just enjoying what you and others post.

  • #530265

    megamillions
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    Thanks Fred,

    I have that song in my head now. πŸ™‚

    Sorry about the block…this one just brought me out of mine.

    πŸ˜‰ Thanks for reading.

  • #530266

    megamillions
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    Thanks Fred,

    I have that song in my head now. πŸ™‚

    Sorry about the block…this one just brought me out of mine.

    πŸ˜‰ Thanks for reading.

  • #530267

    LorrieAT
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    Fred, I can appreciate what you said about writers block. That was why I wrote the poem “Our Time”. I wrote it online so I would be pressured to write something. I put down the first line with no idea what the next one might be or even where I was going with it. Then it begin to flow.

    I guess my subconcious just took over. Or maybe He wrote it.

  • #530268

    whonheheame
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    Lisa, I’m not a sailor, but I still caught the rhythm of the waves with this one. Excellent poem! I’m not sure what “bed of poor” means, other than that it rhymes, but I still like the imagery. πŸ™‚

  • #530269

    whonheheame
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    Lisa, I’m not a sailor, but I still caught the rhythm of the waves with this one. Excellent poem! I’m not sure what “bed of poor” means, other than that it rhymes, but I still like the imagery. πŸ™‚

  • #530270

    megamillions
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    Hi Traci,

    Thank you for reading my poem.

    “Bed of poor” is my sailboat.
    You don’t need fuel for it.

    The sheets for my “bed” are my sails.

    I’m so glad you liked it. πŸ™‚

  • #530271

    whonheheame
    Participant

    Ah, thanks for the clarification! I knew you were talking about a sailboat, but the term was throwing me. Didn’t stop me from enjoying the poem, though. πŸ™‚

  • #530272

    Bruce
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    Lisa,
    I actually see this as a children’s picture book. A child, ill in bed, has an adventure during his sleep.

    I so enjoyed this read,
    Elizabeth

  • #530273

    megamillions
    Participant

    I see you have been very busy this morning, Elizabeth.

    Thank you for reading my poem. You have a unique take on it, and I see how it could read that way.
    It felt child-like, putting it together. Sailing has always been an adventure for me.

    I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

    Good to see you back. πŸ™‚

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