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Deminkspot
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sorry to say, no, i wouldn’t… not from that blurb, anyway… first sentence is a scramble syntax, terminally run-on brain-killer and makes little sense… after that, all the pretentiously-added other lingo stuff is a turn-off of its own… final nail in the coffin is the garbled grammar and equally brain-bruising mess of an also too-long and messed up last sentence…

if you want to attract readers with a back cover blurb, or whatever this is meant to be, i’d say stick to plain english, simpler, well-constructed sentences, and an absolute minimum of non-english words…