Re: Re: Winter Time

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sreicher
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liked it, winter is such a lovely time to write about, i just have a few suggestions:

stanza 1, line 4- changing of to so, just sounded better to me and; stanza 2, line 1- try putting a comma after ‘it’, makes the line break up more and sound better

the whole poem didnt sound quite right, but you said yourself that this is not your normal writing style so that may be it, sounded jagged but has lots of potential

hope to read more