Re: RE: Wide Awake

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sukecal
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It’s probably me….but this poem doesn’t seem to be one of your better works, Lisa.

“Memories of past’s future
exposing foretold pains
Revisited in a theatre
of drama penned for gains”

I don’t know what a “past’s future” is.

I think what you are saying here is “I remember being warned of pain in my future”…..say that…but in a more poetic way.

You know I love you, but this isn’t one of my favorite poems of yours.

tp 🙂