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Bruce
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Tera,
This is really cute. I wonder if your Doc could write a prescription for your internet service:) My Doc gave me a prescription for an ipod. My health insurance wouldn’t cover it:)

Suggestions,
“but sometimes I feel as if I’m standing still and hiding behind a green bush” maybe remove the word green in this line.
Also it feels densly packed. Maybe break it up a bit in to couplets or stanzas? Just a thought:)

Elizabeth