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DCapone
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It reminds me of a part two version of the song “Walk-away Joe”. Change Johnny’s name to Joe and you could have “Walk-away Joe part 2”. 🙂

The first stanza was great. It reminded me of William Carlos Williams’s “The Red Wheelbarrow” in its descriptive simplicity. (I LOVE Williams, by the way!)