Re: RE: Very Seldom Friend

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Bruce
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teradactyl – 2009-03-15 3:07 PM

Very seldom does one find
a genuine friend so kind
to give the shirt off his back
for that shirt that you lack

Very seldom does one find
a genuine friend so kind
and will always be there
when no one else seems to care

Very seldom does one find
a genuine friend so kind
that time and plans made
for themselves disappears for you to gain

Very seldom does one find
a genuine friend so kind
like the friend I have found
when times are tough will always be around

Dedicated to my wonderful friend Nakie

Tera,
I love the sentiment of this.

A couple of thoughts/suggestions:)

In line 7 remove ‘and’ replace with ‘who’
line 12 replace: for you to gain with: for my gain
The last line needs some work, but I’m not sure what to suggest for that.

And I agree with the others, your work/formatting has greatly improved this last few postings. I’m so glad you got your meds. They really do seem to help you focus.
Love and blessings,
Elizabeth (Liz)