Re: Re: Untitled short horror story (~840 words)

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It’s interesting to start but I lost interest when there was nothing to keep me interested. It became a list of things he did and how his dead man felt about it. Why does he have a dead man? Who is he? Who is the dead man? there’s no answers in it for me, I’m introduced to a couple characters out of the air and then nothing. I am curious as to what’s going on, maybe it’s a man who died a violent death in the apartment or home he moved into, is it someone he murdered or accidentally killed that stays with him, is it his identical twin? Is a spirit that attached himself to the MC when the MC was out drunk one night after a bad day when he stumbled into a cemetery…. was it his tour guide on an adventure he went on that gave his life to save him then followed him home…??? How did this man get a dead man?