Re: RE: The Weight Of One Breath

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Angela Roquet
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Yeah, I like this…

This lines seems redundant though—>How heavy can one breath be?

““You’re beautiful….like a landfill fire at sunset. I love you…as long as you don’t bother me.” <---Now this brings back memories, I said this once, then smashed an empty whiskey bottle.