Re: Re: The Trash Collector

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Aywrite23
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@george wrote:

No time for more than this…
It’s not bad although there are problems with sentence structure here and there, punctuation including overused/misused
semi-colons and ellipses while I found word repetition annoying and, 4th paragraph, “between my mother and I/me.” Also
the last paragraph could use some work.
Good luck.

I think the sentence structure thing is a style choice. I’m aware not all of it is grammatically correct, for example.

As for the word repetition…where? What word – or words – are repeated? Could you be specific? Thanks.