Re: Re: The Play

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threeorchids
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Hi Tera,

I like the poem. I also love the tatoo part but would say “I’ll tatto it will words of my life” instead of I’m going to. Also there is is typo. The paper is THEIR stage, not there stage.

The only line that bothers me is “I know the last notebook is without a doubt.” Perhaps you could say “The last notebook left nothing in doub” or something else. I am really not sure what. But that line just bothers me. Wish I could explain it better. Or maybe it is just me.

Linda