I’m sorry, I’m not sure about this. It seems stubbly???
The first line seemed elegant, and then I read the second which seems kinda flippant??
Jewels and Blankets are both plural, but then you write: Hidden in its (singular) many folds.??
The first two lines are softer and somewhat elegant?, but then the last line is so flippant.
I’m just not sure what of this.
dgford – 2007-10-14 3:01 PM
The Pearl Keepers
It lives upon the ocean floor
Open for business all the time
But when it closes up its mouth
It traps its food inside
A search for jewels under blankets
Hidden in its many folds
Hidden in this secret place
And over time it grows
Another girls best friend they say,
With shiny softer glow
As bubbles rise from oyster shells
We could say ‘thar she blows