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IfUBelieve
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You can certainly conjure an image. Beautifully written.

Interestingly enough Lillies noticed the same nits I had so won’t repeat them. Although I might not agree with substituting God for Mother Nature, though as Lillies mentioned the piece would read better if the second one is changed.

Another small nit is “… creaking and moaning wistfully for something to fill them once more.” To my mind, creaking and moaning sound contradictory to wistful and swaying. I do hear them creaking and moaning for sure.

Again, lovely writing, you’ve got something there.

Norah