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I’m sorry but I don’t think this works. It’s reads like a comic book or a poor Saturday morning cartoon. It doesn’t read like a story. Who are these characters? They are paper thin. Even with children’s stoires, some character development is necessary. Do your super heroes have normal lives? Where did they get their super powers? And, I think the adventures are as flat as the characters. There’s no excitement. I think most good children’s stories are enjoyable for the parents as well as for the kids. In my opinion, this comes up short.