Re: Re: Tasting the Memories

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whonheheame
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Welcome to the forum! There’s nothing cliched about this poem; you put images in it that I’ve never seen before.

One technical note: in line 8 you need to change I to me or him to he, so it will read either “him and me” or “he and I.” Not sure which is grammatically correct, but that way the pronouns will be the same kind and those of us who get hung up on such things won’t stumble over it. 🙂

Other than that, excellent first post!