Re: RE: straight outta the mind.

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tijuanasmellsgood
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First of all, use correct English: straight out of the mind. Then, your ideas are rather conventional: man bad, corrupts everything. Nothing new under the sun. I would also suggest you learn how to line-break, it’s not too difficult, just hit “enter”. Perhaps you should read more good poetry to give you an idea of what it consists of.

janet