Hi Crow and welcome –
After reading all the other comments, I’m not sure there’s too much I can add, but wanted to let you know that you do have the beginning of something that you can take further here. Ninety percent of writing is actually re-writing, so keep at it. The people on this forum have a lot of experience to share, no matter what you do or don’t already know. It might be easier on you if you wait to post your work until you’ve re-read it a few times and reworked it – then the comments you get are more useful. Just a gentle thought.
Hope to see more of your work.