Re: Re: Song of the Tone-Deaf

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Well, I will begin by saying that this is your poem and your vision; I always try to respect that when I come in to read and critique. However, I see what Elizabeth is saying (b/c it threw me off too) and I also get the point you’re trying to make, so….. How about: I grew dreams of bridges “being” built, of skin colors crumbling like concrete walls?