Re: RE: Sol-tan

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kimberley
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I like this, Bob. I particularly like:

“defies the decadence of Dubai
divine and celestial above the sheiks”

And the second stanza is brilliant. The only part that I trip over is “Sol is the only legitimate king”. I think it is the words “only legitimate”. Maybe rightful/lawful/true…I don’t know