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I think the word “yakking” robs some of the power–I know the “y’s” are limited. 😉 “yelling a lie” “yes to the lie” “yearning to lie” “yowling a lie” etc.

Also sewer and sewn in this case should be sower and sown.

I love the way you always are willing to try new forms–I keep saying I’m going to follow your example someday–maybe someday I will. When is someday anyway? 😉