Re: Re: RICARDO MONTALBAN WAS A FRIEND OF MINE

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AKnursewriter
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Thanks, that makes a lot more sense to me now. I don’t watch a lot of TV, so I never saw that commercial.

The only thing that I would change about the line you mention would be to change ‘cracking’ to ‘crackling’. To me, that seems to convey a sense of electrical current.