Re: Re: Poem: “Small Town Visitor”

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hannah_ellie
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I loved this, too. Just a few years back, we had a celebrity and local lawyer try to purchase land to create a wasteyard right outside of our town. Not for our garbage, but for New York’s. We finally won.

Suggestion:

“and began to thus tootle his horn:”

I believe the word ‘thus’ belongs before ‘began’.

I adored the imagery of the Michelin Man. Great imagination.