I hate to just say I agree with everyone else (in fact, I think you agreed with everyone else in your second sentence) but I just wanted you to know that I read it, I didn’t come up with any other critiques. I basically agree with the others that you went from story mode into narrative mode, and you might consider leaving it in story mode throughout. Did you ever find out why he wasn’t in a gown? Did it change the way you approached any of your other patients?
Overall, I thought your writing was good, didn’t have anything to add in that aspect.