Re: RE: Never Enough

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Voskamp
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Hi Elizabeth,

I read this three times.  The last one out loud, and then I got its message.  Nicely done.

I think the thing that I got caught up on was the quick change between the following:

Took you out and bought you stuff

When my father died

This just seemed so abrubt, I got hung up there.  I don’t know how you could change this, probably just making the “when my father died” another stanza/ or NOT.  There is a lot of depth here and well stated otherwise.

Lillies