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Bruce
Participant

Wow Kevin! That’s quite a poem. All dark and evil:)

I’m a little reticent to say anything only because your teacher will
be the one who’s feedback is the most important and I don’t want
to mess up your work. I will say that the words such and this seemed
to be used to close together in places.

That ‘such’ a small
trifle could fell ‘such’ a monarch, the trickster did bray
with laughter. Delighting in ‘this’ child king’s gall
the rascal god did finally agree to give ‘this’ man aid.

The jester blesses and so allowed ‘this’ maniac rage does

Hope I’ve helped and not hindered,
Elizabeth