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mlghaley
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amyjean1010 – 2009-03-26 5:28 PM Thank you all for your positive and helpful comments. To answer everyone’s questions about my relations, my grandpa is my dad’s step-dad, although he was never adopted by him. Bill was the only grandpa I ever knew. I wasn’t sure how to write this in, or if it is even relavant. What do you think? Amy

I don’t think it’s relevant; in fact, I think it takes away from the story somewhat. I believe you should express how close you felt to him, by simply removing the reference.

Hope that helps.