Re: RE: my grandpa

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mlghaley
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Very nice story Amy. I agree with Deb – I was confused about the relations as well, and it is difficult to tell how you’re related when you’re not related…  I also think you might want to leave the part “his was the greatest generation” out of the rememberance of the eulogy, and just use that as the last sentence, rather than stating “As I said…”.  Let it stand alone as: “His was the greatest generation.”

I look forward to reading more of your work.