Frist of all you should run a spell check as there are at least two words that you need to correct. “Unknown and unawareness.” Were the two I found.
Pain and hurt is unkown to the mind until it taste something never fed. * This line to me really does not make sense. I think I know what you wanted to state but I think you could make it clearer.
Pain and hurt that’s unknown
to a trusting mind, until
it’s taste is bitterly fed.
Something like that.
I also think poetry is more unlike prose. This is more prose I think. Try breaking it down into short lines, stanzas, etc.
Check around and read some of the other poems and you will get a feel and a idea of how poetry is written.
Read more poetry here or elsewhere, that will be a huge help to you.
You could also try to use other words to relay your poem so that the reader get a picture in their mind that will say more than 50 long darwn out words. Like for example:
The potato was rotten beneath the ground.
“The spud decaying below earth’s crust.” It basically states the same thing but a little better then the first line.
I hope this has been of some help for you.
I do like the idea you have gather with this write, just needs some TLC to bring it into a better flow, etc.