Re: RE: make you mine

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tijuanasmellsgood
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Chris – this is a very passionate, I would even say obsessive love poem, with many fantastic images. I would suggest that you give it time to cool off then re-read it, I think there are a few places where it can be tightened up, and would be glad to suggest them to you, although it would be best if you could learn to be your own best critic and polish your work yourself. Howevers, I am available for a few suggestions if you’d like them….

janet