Re: Re: Love for Satan

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Deminkspot
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jason…
when writing a rhymed poem, you need to establish and maintain a consistent rhyme scheme and meter, or it’s too ragged a read, has no flow… unfortunately, that’s true of this piece… plus, some of the rhymed words are clearly forced, are repeats, or don’t even rhyme, making little sense…

i mentor and tutor many aspiring poets, so if you want some help making this into a more readable and sense-making poem, just drop me a line…

love and hugs, maia
maia3maia@hotmail.com