Re: Re: Is my Query worthy? Does it say, I want to read more?

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Deminkspot
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sorry, but this is guaranteed to end up in the round file, or generate a stock rejection letter… here are just some of the reasons:

no polite addressing the agent, with your reason for querying her/him in particular
a poor, poorly-worded ‘hook’ line
saying it’s ‘completed’ which is always assumed, since if it weren’t, you shouldn’t be querying
asking a question
poorly worded and terribly run-on sentences, indicating that the ms will be similarly flawed
capitalizing ‘witches’
that ‘i am’ paragraph in toto… badly worded/punctuated and info that should never be put in a query
not closing with offer to send sample chapters, or full ms on request…

you need to study how to write a good query… there’s lots of advice on the net… or i can send you some tips from the pros, if you email me…

i’d strongly suggest you have someone knowledgeable take a look at your ms, to make sure it’s up to minimum marketable standards, before querying any further, since if this is indicative of the quality of the writing in your ms, it won’t make the grade… sorry i don’t have better news for you…

love and hugs, maia