Re: Re: Ingrain

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jayrbee777
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Hmmm . . . Ingrain — and pine (and ring, too) — in conjunction with willow weeping all seem to lend a semi-humorous ‘punny’ feel to the start of this poem (for me), while the ending seems much more serious and introspective. I might take the beginning more seriously if you were longing, rather than pining — and coming in with a different title. Destiny, perhaps — as you mentioned, or Deliverance … Exit … Passage, maybe something along those lines? Just my thoughts. (I could be way off base, but that’s how I read it. 😉 )