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There are some profound thoughts here.. What I hear in this is the theme of reality and illusion.. If you are looking for ideas on how to structure it differently, then I wonder if charades should be on the same line as ‘house of cards’ ?… To me, I hear this line about house of cards and then all of a sudden the word ‘charades’.. I don’t know if anyone else ponders that… but to me, its just appears.. charades.. and maybe that is your intention?
Hmmm.. Anyway, there is some thought in this..