Thanks Ablurition. That’s how they sound to me too, but it’s easy to make sense of the monologue I guess — when it’s your own.
Thank you G-Girl for your clarifications. I will revisit my parens before I enter this one into the PAD challenge. And thank you (even more! ;)) for your kind evaluation of my attempt at poetry. Sometimes I really like them, and sometimes they fall way short of what I am aiming for — but that’s a topic for another poem. You have truly made my day! 🙂 (That’s me — grinning!)