Re: Re: High School Chemistry Lesson (PAD day 8)

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bigiq
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My problem with the parentheses is that the statements enclosed by them, with the exception of the first, do not read like asides. The statements seem more to belong to the main body of the poem. With the (possible) exception of the first and the one about glass under the bridge, I’d much prefer it without the parentheses. That said, I seek out your poems because they’re always good–and this is no exception.