Re: Re: He Came (take two)

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Bruce
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I like this Pam. I’m wondering, would any of the words realm or world work better in the second line, last stanza? Life seems kinda dull when you are talking about soulmates. I’m thinking trancending one physical lifetime and looking more at an eternity of lifetimes. Just a muggled thought:)

Elizabeth