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I enjoyed all of this, including the poetry. I don’t know much about the rules of poetry but I do know about the emotions of it.
“Absence of laughter” seems so matter-of-fact to me. I think you could say it in a different way that would convey more meaning.
The laughter was gone
The children no longer there
Summer grass was dying
Just a suggestion. Like I said, I know very little about this type of poetry.