Re: Re: Haiku practice (for fun) and attempt at a Quatrain

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Dizi_Di
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Thanks, Paige. Regarding the first one – yea, the title is a bit off because I picture an empty playground with abandoned swings, merry-go-round, seesaw, etc. It’s a feeling of loneliness and desolation. In a way, the playground is “sleeping in sunlight”, but it does still feel off to me as well. Thanks again for taking time to read them.