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I think you’ve really caught the heart of haiku with those. Excellent!
Now, the quatrain…shouldn’t it have “feet”, a regular rhythm?
I guess I just associate such strict syllable limits in English style poetry with a strong (if not perfect) rhythmic feel.
The rigid syllables and length of haiku give it it’s own internal strength. Of course you’ve rhymed, but I think probably next you should try guiding the stresses.
It can be really interesting to work with rigorous structures! Good luck!