Hi Pat, I just finished reading your story, it was awesome! I love the way you were able to establish the Angel’s presence at the beginning. I understand that you wrote it to be fiction, but it can very well be a true story. I have been in the presence of people when they were dying or in an comma and I could sense the presence of angels.
You did a great job with the story and the suggestions by Cathy were right on. Wonderful job. 🙂