Thanks for responding to my piece. I agree with the way you stated it sounds much better (your sentences do flow much easier together)than the way I wrote it. I haven’t submitted anything to the digest in some time, you made me glad I submitted this piece, as I like your suggestion. Thanks for the critque.
His mind seemed to be locked in a space between life and death, preventing him from communicating. He could not open his eyes nor move his hands or limbs.