Hi Janet –
This one really interests me. The room fills with absences – great way to start. “Like the after tone of church bells” is a wonderful line – I can feel that vibration. In the last line of the first stanza, do you need, “though”? In the second stanza, “an almost felt/a tenseness in the heart” – I stumbled on that. Should “an” be left off, or should “a” be left off, or am I reading this wrong? Like the feel of this, Janet.