Re: Re: from my _____.

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LorrieAT
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FROM MY HOME FROM MY HEART
ALL THESE THINGS JUST FELL APART
FROM THIS PEN FROM THIS PAIN
I’VE FOUND SO MANY WORDS IN VAIN
FROM THIS HEAD FROM THESE HANDS
MANY WORDS I DON”T UNDERSTAND


“SPILL SO”—(reads better without these)
BUT NOT AGAIN I WON’T REPEAT
THIS TIME I WON’T ACCEPT DEFEAT

I like this, but I find it reads better without the two words I pulled out. You can put them back in your word box
and use them another day.

Gilbert