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ghoulie
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Hi Tera –

You have a nice start here, but here’s a thought: The first word of every single line is general, vague. Poetry needs specificity – it’s a slice, a pivotal moment, a bit of amazing clarity. Let us know exactly what you see in those daydreams so that we believe you about the journey that you love to chase. 🙂